Your explanation of the camera shots and angles is splendidly detailed but I'm not too sure about how convincingly you can deliver this opening which will rely on very strong performances with perhaps older actors. I know you can deliver the camera angles and movement but I'm not sure about the action.
Try to draw on a more realistic situation. Gun crime is minimal in the UK and two identical notes may not be enough to warrant a murder!!! Most students who have used guns in thrillers have struggled with authenticity (lost marks) mainly because they are out of their depth with a situation isn't convincing.
The problem with a body and a murder is that it leaves little suspense left for another 2 hours of film to proceed. The examiners have often explained that students openings to films are stand alone short films rather than an opening sequence.
Think about the girl writing some kind of note in a darkened room (chiaroscuro lighting) with lamp on etc. She is writing a note and pins it to a table, puts on her coat etc then the camera pans over to the bed and there is a body on it. She has ignored this and leaves the room and walks unperturbed down the street ....... this is quite spooky because it raises questions about the girl's state of mind; is this illusion or reality; what sort of person is she??????
Gun and forest......I'd lose this and focus on composition, close ups, shadows, camera angles and movement and the enigma, rather than plot!
Your explanation of the camera shots and angles is splendidly detailed but I'm not too sure about how convincingly you can deliver this opening which will rely on very strong performances with perhaps older actors. I know you can deliver the camera angles and movement but I'm not sure about the action.
ReplyDeleteTry to draw on a more realistic situation. Gun crime is minimal in the UK and two identical notes may not be enough to warrant a murder!!! Most students who have used guns in thrillers have struggled with authenticity (lost marks) mainly because they are out of their depth with a situation isn't convincing.
The problem with a body and a murder is that it leaves little suspense left for another 2 hours of film to proceed. The examiners have often explained that students openings to films are stand alone short films rather than an opening sequence.
Think about the girl writing some kind of note in a darkened room (chiaroscuro lighting) with lamp on etc. She is writing a note and pins it to a table, puts on her coat etc then the camera pans over to the bed and there is a body on it. She has ignored this and leaves the room and walks unperturbed down the street ....... this is quite spooky because it raises questions about the girl's state of mind; is this illusion or reality; what sort of person is she??????
Gun and forest......I'd lose this and focus on composition, close ups, shadows, camera angles and movement and the enigma, rather than plot!
Splendid planning nevertheless.
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